My Mum
My mums name is Kelly and she is 32 turning 33. I like her because shes nice to us kids. She is a netball coach at Pt England School for the year six team two,She works hard to train us for netball. My mum really likes sports like netball and rugby.
My Aunty
My aunt's name is Danna and she is 34 turning 35. My aunty is my mum's cousin and she lives in Panmure. We always go to her house in the weekends to play with my cousins. She really likes football, Netball and Rugby.
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